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Just in time for Veteran's Day!
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Post is in the private channel for viewing.  Sam I think i invited you too, but if I didn't, I can post it or email it to you.
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I saw it and replied. :)
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posted.

added a paragraph, and I think two lines for you Sam.
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Good job, Marcus. I'll post mine on Sunday. I want to give it the once-over since it is my first attempt at a first-person narrative. I'll also post the next one after that, with Gavin on Foroest prepping for the mission and learning that Marcus has said no to Troutman's proposal.
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And posted! Lot shorter than I realized, and I plan to revert back to third-person narrative in the follow up on Foroest. The whole rah-rah fire and idealism segment comes from The Rebel Files, and was a message Mon Mothma had sent to Princess Leia way back when.
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Nice Post Gavin!
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Gavin, you're still up to post next right?
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Yes, I am. I'm sorry, but the holiday season hasn't been real conducive for writing.
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Merry Christmas! Gavin on Foerost, and learning that his mission is kaput for the time being. Apologies for it taking so long.
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No worries, the holidays took all time from me, and I'm just seeing this now.  excited to read.
 
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It was great Gavin, loved the coded speak.  I'll start working on my next two parter.
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Hey Gavin, I'm stuck on the post.

I know our original thought was to have Marcus come to the town, but I think with him meeting Troutman delayed that, and he'd miss the atttack.  What do you think of Marcus chasing after the first order ship and mounting a rescue?  Or would the first order set up a camp on the surface to sort people fiorst.  What are your thoughts?

personally I'd prefer to keep it on planet, but I'm not seeing what would keep them there.  Maybe setting up an impromtu brothel with the kidnapped women?  Been trying to solve this one for a while.
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When we last left Marcus, he was at home waiting for Mabby and Maven's return. As the hours pass, I'm assuming Marcus begins to grow worried especially if he can't raise them on the comlink (electronic jamming of communication network by proto-First Order). Don't know how far you've progressed in your post, but what if Marcus hears explosions in distance, rushes out onto porch of his homestead, and sees smoke rising into skies in the vicinity of town? Marcus rushes to grab his blasters, and must choose mode of transport: Your Uulshos yacht, or your trusty fathier (Please, please choose fathier! Marcus can cavalry charge into town, clenching reins in his teeth with blasters in both hands blazing away at stormtroopers)?
Arriving in town, Marcus sees the death and destruction–Sohen is dead, among others–and AAL transports are lifting off, except for one last ship still loading.  Perhaps Marcus sees an item belonging to Mabby or Maven on the ground, and he hopes they are aboard it? Marcus attacks, and the FO troopers are no match for him. Marcus discovers Mabby and Maven are not aboard, but the ship contains a load of frightened children. Marcus realizes that they can't remain in town, so he decides to try to fly the AAL back to his homestead. Proto-First Order tracks Marcus there, and TIEs strafe/bomb homestead, but Marcus has sheltered children in tunnels. Marcus still has communicator Troutman gave him, so he can use that to signal for help. Enemy com-scan will undoubtedly pick that up, which will force their retreat so that their presence will not be discovered. Troutman answers signal, and Marcus can tell him what happened, and that Mabby and Maven have been abducted. Troutman says he will send help, and this could be where Marcus says he's back in fight. Marcus will also tell Troutman about the children. When help finally arrives, this can be where Troutman gives Marcus his instructions to fly to Batuu.

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